"Seeing Rhetorically" Writing Exercise My Roommate's Bed - Positive My roommate's bed is spotless. She always has it made. Never is a single pillow ruffled; no sheets peek out from under the comforter. Over the summer, she and I decided to make animal print the dominant characteristic of our room. Although I stuck to zebra stripe, her bed linens incorporate every animal print imaginable. She chose a bed set that has small zebra print running the length.
In between is a larger strip of dark leopard spots and a deep tan background. The two prints contrast each other as much as the zebras and leopards themselves, making it a discern able item that draws attention to itself. An overstuffed pillow sits in the right hand corner of the bed. It is of cheetah print with dark brown and black tones that greatly contrasts the brightness of the comforter. I, however, believe the fact that it clashes with the bedspread adds mystery: her bed would look like long stripes of zebra and leopard without this huge contrast of hues to divert the eye away from vertigo. My Roommate's Bed - Negative My roommate's bed is spotless.
Her bed is always spotless considering she is never in it. Rarely has a single pillow been moved; no sheets peek out from under the stagnant comforter. Although we decided to make animal print the dominant characteristic of our room, it is hard to do this and still keep the idea of "taste" in tact. My side is stylish; the other side is tacky.
The colors used in the comforter are loud and bright. Because the zebra stripes are small and the leopard print between them has such a contrast of color, the bed looks so busy that I am afraid it may jump up and attack at any moment. Then there is the pillow she insists matches her bed. The pillow is of cheetah print. And yes, there is a big difference between leopard and cheetah print (leopard print is solid dots while cheetah print is only an outline of color). When a person looks at her bed, the eye wanders to the insipid lack of color the cheetah print pillow offers.
Compared to the bright colors, which is the only good thing, at the least, that the bed set has going for it, the cheetah pillow is the ugly, deformed M&M whose peanut is sticking out halfway, creating a bulge in one side that makes one throw it away rather than eat it. Rhetorical Structure My writing expressly conveys my meaning in a direct way. Although I did not start my paragraphs with, "My roommate's tasteful bed is spotless because she is a clean person," or, "My roommate's bed is spotless because she never has a chance to mess up the ugly thing," my meaning was implied. But it was not vaguely implied. By the second sentence in the negative paragraph, my reader knows why I have perceived her bed is always spotless. The first paragraph's meaning is backed up in the second sentence, which implies she is a very tidy person.
The details I selected support each paragraph. In the positive paragraph, I made a point to describe how presentable the placement of objects on her bed is. I also tried to paint a picture of the comforter as if the reader was actually seeing it. The way I described it left a tinge of admirability, but just enough to allow the reader to decide on his or her own. Rather than implying the bright colors were pleasing to the eye as in the first paragraph, the negative paragraph was intended to lead the reader to believe the brightness of the comforter was too much and too busy to be attractive. The description of the pillow that "added contrast" in the first paragraph is now an eyesore.
The connotation in the first paragraph is of a positive idea. "Always" and "never" carries heavy meaning when describing how clean and well-made the bed is kept. "Contrast,"discern able" and "incorporate" were used to show how a negative idea can be a positive outcome. But in the second paragraph, my connotation was much less subtle. "Always" and "never" were used in a negative way.
"Insipid lack of color,"ugly,"tacky" and "tasteless" were imperative to creating an off-putting tone for describing the bed linens. Although figurative language is important to creating a paragraph of excellent rhetoric, my first paragraph only has one discern able instance of it, and that is when I speak of vertigo. The second paragraph, on the other hand, is full of figurative language. I think it is in part because I side more with the second paragraph than I do the first. I included a metaphor to an M&M and gave the comforter animal-like qualities by using personification. The sentence structure in both paragraphs was important to me.
I tried to use the same words to structure the a few of the sentences, exploiting this use for rhetoric. The best example of my sentence structure is compared in, "Although I stuck to zebra stripe, her bed linens incorporate every animal print imaginable," for paragraph one and, "Although we decided to make animal print the dominant characteristic of our room, it is hard to do this and still keep the idea of 'taste' in tact." I tried not to keep the other sentences that close together in form in order to create more varied paragraphs. However, the first few sentences are essentially the same; a few connotative words separate the two. So What? So what did I learn through this exercise? Honestly, I learned nothing.
On a broad spectrum, my life is essentially based on the idea that different perceptions lead to different emotions, motivations, actions and words. But on a narrowed subject that is more appropriate for this paper on the use of rhetoric, I have formerly practiced such an exercise and yeah it then helped me to broaden my scope of the reader as well as the "writer."Writer" must be in quotations because aren't we all, fundamentally, in quotations due to our different perceptions? Although this is a wonderful exercise in rhetoric, to me it seems a bit too challenging of the writer's views. An essay is used "to trial run personal perceptions (English 1302 Class Notes: 8-23-2001)." This exercise seems to be a very arcane way of exploring an "essay." But then again, I argue for the sake of argument!