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18 Mar 2005 Kirsten Yates-KonzenNick Callahan / ENG 1010 Essay Entitled "My Profession: Becoming a Pharmacist" The whole writing process wasn't easy. It took a lot of time to even start constructing the essay. I had to think back to days when I was younger to get ideas. I spent hours of research on the computer looking up information to try and construct a paper. I had three drafts all together; they are almost constructed in the same way.

The first two are constructed like this: they have the introduction, then the reason one would want to become a pharmacist, my plan of action, downsides and conclusion. I turned the first two in leaving out a pretty important thing, the job outlook and job description. Overall I think the final essay is written better than the first two. I fixed up on some of my problem areas.

One of the areas I had the problem in is tone. I made it seem like I was talking to one of my friends. It needed to be more formal and I made it more formal. I also tend to talk too much and put in unnecessary words. So I shortened it up a bit to get the message across better. On the other hand I had some strengths in the paper as well.

I made good arguments against the cost of the education and difficulty level. I also think since going over it and making it a little more condensed it flows better and isn't as choppy as it was before. This essay has taught me how to write a better paper. It's taught me about tone, unity, and development. Before this paper I jumped around from thing to thing and the message wasn't always clear but after the conferences I have become a better writer. The final essay flows a lot better than the first and it's definitely clearer than the first two.

I didn't think I could make it four pages and have it not sound developed but I did.